Boo,one spooky night a ghost was hovering around in a mall. When the mall closed the Security guard was spooked out every night.The only things he had were a flash light and keys.The security guard could hear strange noises coming from the elevator.The security guard was wondering what the ghost was saying he could never hear what he said so he just went up the escalator and patrolled the top of the building just to see if people weren’t hiding.The security guard was a tall muscular man his fear was spiders.He would go home and wonder what would happen the next day.
A nice effort with a story opener. I do pity the poor Security Guard. He must get scared sometimes. Whose ghost is it? Will it cause trouble for him? It does make me want to find out what will happen at this spooky mall.
ReplyDeleteYour next step is to include similies and some more exciting adjectives to develop your descriptions.
Hi Alex,
ReplyDeleteI liked reading your story but you need to use he or something else because all it say is the security this, and the security that.
This is a wonderful story and I enjoyed it so much that I got goose bumps and all up it's just a really good story.
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Hi Alex,
ReplyDeleteLove your stories. Poor old Security Guard...he should get another job!
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